aggipanthus
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Ashbee... don't telly tubbies (your description) have reinforced legs... on their kitchen table of course! Sorry, getting off the subject....
Shall we wait until Issi and other writing regulars come back on the question of how often? I might not be able to do one a week, may not have the time, which is why I said once every two weeks. And what is the eyes down book club???
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Ashbee
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Gothfairy - there's a long story attached to our dining table, but I have promised myself my next table will definately have reinforced legs ...he,he, he!
Take your point about not having the time so maybe if others will agree to make suggestions too we can carry on having fun and frolics in 100 words or less...
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Chickadee
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Reged: 28/03/2008
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Loc: South Wales
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Hells bells - just realised I messed up! You are all very polite not to point my senior moment out to me! I did a short story with the required opening, didn't like it and then wrote something that was cooking at the back of my mind and posted that instead...sorry! Could do lines (I must read the rubric properly) or will this do by way of penance?
“Suddenly the back door flew open...” Valaber looked up from the computer, unable to think of anything witty or dramatic to match the immediacy of this compelling opening. “What would Minette Walters write?” she wondered, sighing in frustration. Suddenly her eye was caught by a golden feather swirling outside the window. She was transported back to that long ago day, when she found an owl. She remembered the intensity of the gaze, the fierce grip of its talons on her hand. Forgetting the set task, she began to type at a furious pace – this was it! This was the story she had to tell!
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AlexP
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Reged: 28/12/2007
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Loc: Southampton
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Gothfairy - an exercise once a week would be great!
Loved reading the responses to this exercise - all really good and so different.
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AlexP
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Sorry gothfairy - didn't see your later post re. an exercise once a week being a bit too often - once every two weeks is also fine. Unless, as I think Ashbee suggested, we all offer some suggestions for opening lines.
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Ashbee
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Oh, well saved Valaber! Great re-write...no lines the first time but any more senior moments and I'm sure Gothfairy will come up with a suitable punishment...
In the meantime - all your ideas for another brilliant opening line by next Friday please...
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issi
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Reged: 30/09/2007
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Loc: Surrey
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Well, I am off the computer for only a couple of days and you have come up with a great idea. I am still laughing at Ashbee's fantasy - wish I had thought of that! Looking forward to the next opening line and trying to think of one at the same time.
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Barney
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Reged: 01/04/2008
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Loc: Northumberland
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Suddenly the back door flew open and the noise engulfed me. The wailing shrill of the sirens disturbed my peace. I looked down and saw blood spilling out from his twisted body on the kitchen floor. It was a surprise to see how far the red rivulets reached, filling all the channels between the tiles.
'Put it down on the floor, slowly...slowly' urged a stranger dressed in blue.
'Put what on the floor?' I stammered before realising I held a cooks knife in my hand.
'All I wanted was peace. Peace.' I tried to explain, but they didn't understand.
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Ashbee
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Oo-er, Barney! Remind me never to upset you...
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Brenda1948
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Loc: West Sussex
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Suddenly, the back door flew open, and Jenny rushed in. "I'm sorry I'm late. Is she mad with me" Lisa was spooning instant coffee into mugs. She shook her head and gave a rueful grin. "Honestly, Jenny, you're chief bridesmaid. You could have been on time today of all days. Melissa's upstairs having her hair done. Where have you been?"
"I didn't mean to be late, but I met John when I stopped for petrol. He's just got back and he looks great. I must go up to Mel - is one of those coffees for me?"
Lisa froze. John was back?
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